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ShadowFlare
by ShadowFlare Mon Sep 02, 2013 7:55 am
Name: ShadowFlare
Gender:Male
Species:Pegasi
Mane:black with red
Tail:red
Eyes:a calm blue
Body: black
Cutie Mark: a sword with a rose wrapped around the blade
Age: 18
Personality: he's adventurous charming and always looks out for overs
Likes: adventures, his home in cloudsdale
Dislikes: certain reptiles
History:shadowflare was born and orphaned as a colt he never knew his parents. But they left him a small puzzle so they could meat one day. As he grew older he spent most of his time tryin to solve the puzzle itself. But he gained no friends. The Pegasus spent all his time alone till he was old enough. The. Set out on a quest to find the answers to his puzzle and find his parents.
Later he met up with a large winged Pegasus named halostorm, and a young dragon named fang who were searching for some mystics that murdered his parents. Shadowflare told them he would let them know if he found anything, and strangely halo recognized the puzzle. The puzzle of the guardian, a sacred relic in shadowflare's family said to only open when the hero found his true potential. He thanked he duo and set off to find his potential, making a perminent home in cloudsdale.
Example RP segment: Shadowflare flew through the sky's on his next destination. He had a clue that another part of the puzzle was hidden somewhere in everfree forest. He would search everywhere till he found it. "Man why does this forest have to be so big. He sighed diving into the heart of the forest.
Gender:Male
Species:Pegasi
Mane:black with red
Tail:red
Eyes:a calm blue
Body: black
Cutie Mark: a sword with a rose wrapped around the blade
Age: 18
Personality: he's adventurous charming and always looks out for overs
Likes: adventures, his home in cloudsdale
Dislikes: certain reptiles
History:shadowflare was born and orphaned as a colt he never knew his parents. But they left him a small puzzle so they could meat one day. As he grew older he spent most of his time tryin to solve the puzzle itself. But he gained no friends. The Pegasus spent all his time alone till he was old enough. The. Set out on a quest to find the answers to his puzzle and find his parents.
Later he met up with a large winged Pegasus named halostorm, and a young dragon named fang who were searching for some mystics that murdered his parents. Shadowflare told them he would let them know if he found anything, and strangely halo recognized the puzzle. The puzzle of the guardian, a sacred relic in shadowflare's family said to only open when the hero found his true potential. He thanked he duo and set off to find his potential, making a perminent home in cloudsdale.
Example RP segment: Shadowflare flew through the sky's on his next destination. He had a clue that another part of the puzzle was hidden somewhere in everfree forest. He would search everywhere till he found it. "Man why does this forest have to be so big. He sighed diving into the heart of the forest.
Last edited by ShadowFlare on Tue Sep 10, 2013 4:21 am; edited 1 time in total
ShadowFlare- Posts : 26
Join date : 2013-09-02
Age : 29
Re: ShadowFlare
by Dark The Pegasus Fri Sep 06, 2013 1:54 pm
Very nice! just a few things though.
1. this is meant to be posted in the ''Submitted OC's area'', not the pegasi area. But ill let you off the hook.
2. If you could watch your grammar and punctuation, that would be good.
3. his history is a bit short and doesn't seem to detailed. could you detail it a bit more?
Apart from those, your so close to being accepted! ^^
1. this is meant to be posted in the ''Submitted OC's area'', not the pegasi area. But ill let you off the hook.
2. If you could watch your grammar and punctuation, that would be good.
3. his history is a bit short and doesn't seem to detailed. could you detail it a bit more?
Apart from those, your so close to being accepted! ^^
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ShadowFlare- Posts : 26
Join date : 2013-09-02
Age : 29
Re: ShadowFlare
by Dark The Pegasus Sun Sep 22, 2013 11:18 am
Guess what? you have beennnn..
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ACCEPTED c: welcome to the forum!
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ACCEPTED c: welcome to the forum!
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